[brownman]

tyfu,my dimes worth,it still looks like your swinging,maybe switting,my limited knowledge tells me that you should be letting the c/face look at the ball more.
takeaway looks wrong also,look up in search toolbar for "hitting stickman" it may clarify re-c/face looking at ball.
Im no teacher,but have used hitters pattern for last 2 yrs,and luv it. good luck man